Zoo by Radarsoft in english

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By gdx

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28-01-2017, 13:31

The Kid, You have not seen this remark:

"DE BEWAKER VERTELD: "DE LAATSTE TIJD STERVEN ER " - "THE GUARD SAYS:"MORE AND MORE ANIMALS HAVE BEEN "
"STEEDS DIEREN. WE ZIJN HOPELOOS! HET ZOU NATUURLIJK " - "DYING LATELY. WE ARE HOPELESS! IT WOULD OFCOURSE BE "
"RAMPZALIG ZIJN VOOR ONZE REPUTATIE ALS DIT BEKEND " - "DISASTROUS TO OUR REPUTATION IF THIS WERE TO COME "
"WERD. VANDAAR DAT WE IN HET GEHEIM NIEUWE DIEREN " - "OUT. THAT IS WHY WE SECRETLY BUY REPLACEMENT     "
"KOPEN." - "ANIMALS." <- Too long!

This text must be rethought. I also think there are a few texts with problems towards the end.

By ren

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28-01-2017, 13:28

#077 IN EEN VAN DEZE LADES MOET TOCH HET ARRESTATIEBEVEL LIGGEN! [60]

curr: IN ONE OF THESE DRAWERS THERE MUST BE AN ARREST WARRANT! [57]
sugg: SURELY THE ARREST WARRANT MUST BE IN ONE OF THESE DRAWERS! [58]

(THE arrest warrant, or AN arrest warrant?)

By Manuel

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28-01-2017, 13:34

What about something like this: The guard says: "Our animals are dying lately. We are desperate! To protect our reputation, we are secretly buying new ones."

By ren

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28-01-2017, 14:08

Btw: I feel 'guard' is a bit weird/off.. Wouldn't it be more appropriate to translate 'bewaker' by something like '(zoo) keeper'?

edit: instead of 'replacement animals' use 'new animals'.

Agreeing: 'desperate' instead of 'hopeless' seems more fitting.

'ofcourse' (it's: 'of course' btw) can be left out, unnecessary .

By ren

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28-01-2017, 16:35

I have some final suggestions (and corrections), will post this evening.
Saw some differences between TheKid text and gdx text, latter takes precedence right?

By ren

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28-01-2017, 19:28

Ok, complete spreadsheet.

First column is 'Status':

c - changed (small(er))
C - Changed (big(ger))
d - difference kid <> gdx
? - more investigation needed?

Where Status is empty, I made no change.

I gave the text found in gdx latest file precedence.
As much possible I commented the changes/suggestions.

If anyone has feedback/comments on stuff, please do (state the 'line' pls ;))

By Manuel

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28-01-2017, 21:19

Quote:

ESPECIALLY SINCE NO LESS THAN $ 314,159.27 FOR NEW ANIMALS WAS ISSUED LAST MONTH.

Why not "IS SPENT"? Or even "HAS BEEN SPENT"

Quote:

THE CLERK GLARES AT YOU GRUMPILY.

what about "CASHIER"?

Quote:

THE GIRAFFE WON'T SAY ANYTHING, PROBABLY HE DOESN'T DARE STICKING HIS NECK OUT..

What about "STICKING OUT HIS NECK"?

DRUNKARD can be shortened to "DRUNK".

Quote:

HIHI, DON’T TICKLE

Do people say "hihi" in English when tickled?

It's tyrannosaurus, with double n.

Quote:

A WAREHOUSE FOR FEED ETC.

FEED -> FORAGE?

By ren

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28-01-2017, 22:57

Quote:
Quote:

ESPECIALLY SINCE NO LESS THAN $ 314,159.27 FOR NEW ANIMALS WAS ISSUED LAST MONTH.

Why not "IS SPENT"? Or even "HAS BEEN SPENT"

That syntax was already there, but I'm not adverse to it (I like it in a way), do you think it's incorrect?

Quote:
Quote:

THE CLERK GLARES AT YOU GRUMPILY.

what about "CASHIER"?

Agreed.

Quote:
Quote:

THE GIRAFFE WON'T SAY ANYTHING, PROBABLY HE DOESN'T DARE STICKING HIS NECK OUT..

What about "STICKING OUT HIS NECK"?

Agreed.

Quote:
Quote:

HIHI, DON’T TICKLE

Do people say "hihi" in English when tickled?

No, but penguins do.. Wink
Seriously though, good one Wink I believe 'teehee' or 'tehee' can be used.

Quote:
Quote:

A WAREHOUSE FOR FEED ETC.

FEED -> FORAGE?

I guess both can be used.

Thanks! (sheet updated) (added update column: day-rev)

(edit: also check line #106)

By gdx

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29-01-2017, 15:19

ren wrote:

Saw some differences between TheKid text and gdx text, latter takes precedence right?

My file just serves to show you the format of texts. Some sentences are spread over several lines for example.

By TheKid

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30-01-2017, 07:51

Okay, missed that oneSmile Like manuel suggested, change replacement animals in "new animals".

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