Zoo by Radarsoft in english

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By TheKid

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30-01-2017, 07:57

Since ren has made I new list, I don't know which list is used anymore. I've have updated the inital list with the latest suggestions by manuel. (and checked them on the length). updated list

By gdx

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30-01-2017, 09:31

W.I.P.

I have updated the texts to be integrated by trying to take into account the work of all. This is the final translation unless someone gives good reason to update a text again.

Zoo translation.zip

Now only give the sentences you want to correct with explanations please.

By ren

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30-01-2017, 11:32

@TheKid I think that spreadsheet is most easy to work with, and easy for people to have a (final) look at stuff? (Just state line + make suggestion).

I felt I had to step in a bit, because you stated the text was fine, but I still found numerous bits that could be improved upon (some up to discussion, others incorrect (AFAICT)) & some typos.
I'd rather have a solid piece of work, instead of rushed or half-done (no offense of course).

I'll have a look at gdx's file. Perhaps today/tomorrow final suggestions/improvements & wrap it up after that?

By ren

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30-01-2017, 15:05

#070

"HET KANTOOR VAN DE STICHTING HULP AAN EENZAME DIEREN." - "THE OFFICE OF THE FOUNDATION TO AID LONELY ANIMALS.  "
"HET KANTOOR VAN DE STICHTING HULP AAN EENZAME DIEREN." - "THE OFFICE OF THE AID TO LONELY ANIMALS FOUNDATION.  "

  It's an institutional name.
  Example of something that actually exists: The Animal Aid Foundation.
  Note that the original text use capitalization: stichting Hulp Aan Eenzame Dieren
  So in English: The Aid To Loneley Animals Foundation

  (Are we sure we're not overwriting intended capitalization in other places?)


#074-076

"UIT DE BRIEVEN DIE OP DEZE SCHIJF STAAN BLIJKT DAT "   - "DOCUMENTS ON THIS FLOPPY DISK SHOW THE ZOO IS NOT   "
"HET SLECHT GAAT MET DE ZOO, ZEKER NU ER DE LAATSTE "   - "DOING WELL, ESPECIALLY SINCE NO LESS THAN          "
"MAAND VOOR MAAR LIEFST FL 314.159,27 AAN NIEUWE "      - " $314,159.27 FOR NEW ANIMALS WAS ISSUED LAST    "
"DIEREN IS UITGEGEVEN. VERDER BLIJKT DAT DE GESTORVEN " - "MONTH. FURTHERMORE IT APPEARED THE DEAD SPECIMENS    "
 "EXEMPLAREN GROTE HOEVEELHEDEN LANDBOUWGIF IN ZICH "   - "HAD LARGE QUANTITIES OF PESTICIDES IN             "
 "HADDEN..."                                            - "THEM...  "

"UIT DE BRIEVEN DIE OP DEZE SCHIJF STAAN BLIJKT DAT "   - "DOCUMENTS ON THIS FLOPPY DISK SHOW THE ZOO IS NOT   "
"HET SLECHT GAAT MET DE ZOO, ZEKER NU ER DE LAATSTE "   - "DOING WELL, ESPECIALLY SINCE NO LESS THAN          "
"MAAND VOOR MAAR LIEFST FL 314.159,27 AAN NIEUWE "      - "$314,159.27 FOR NEW ANIMALS WAS ISSUED LAST     "
"DIEREN IS UITGEGEVEN. VERDER BLIJKT DAT DE GESTORVEN " - "MONTH. FURTHERMORE IT APPEARS THE DEAD SPECIMENS     "
"EXEMPLAREN GROTE HOEVEELHEDEN LANDBOUWGIF IN ZICH "    - "HAD LARGE QUANTITIES OF PESTICIDES IN THEM        "
"HADDEN..."                                             - ""

  * -space
  * APPEARS instead of APPEARED
  * just use empty last line instead of putting a single word there?


#077

"IN EEN VAN DEZE LADES MOET TOCH HET ARRESTATIEBEVEL LIGGEN!" -  "SURELY THE ARREST WARRANT MUST BE IN ONE OF THESE DRAWERS! "
"IN EEN VAN DEZE LADES MOET TOCH HET ARRESTATIEBEVEL LIGGEN!" -  "THE ARREST WARRANT OUGHT TO BE IN ONE OF THESE DRAWERS!    "

  Better.


#078

"AAN HET LOKET VAN DE BANK." - "AT THE COUNTER OF BANK.   "
"AAN HET LOKET VAN DE BANK." - "AT THE BANK'S COUNTER.    "

  Not perfect, but better perhaps?


#090

"TOEGANG: F 10,--" - "ENTRY: $10,--   "
"TOEGANG: F 10,--" - "ENTRY: $10.     "

  I don't think US uses the ",-" construct?


#097

"HET LIJKT ALSOF DIT OPEN KAN, ZOU ER MISSCHIEN EEN " - "IT SEEMS THIS CAN BE OPENEND, COULD THERE BE A     "
"HET LIJKT ALSOF DIT OPEN KAN, ZOU ER MISSCHIEN EEN " - "IT SEEMS THIS CAN BE OPENED, COULD THERE BE A      "

  Typo


#113-114

"HET BANDJE BEVAT EEN ENKELE MAANDEN OUDE MEMO VAN DE " - "THE TAPE HOLDS A FEW MONTHS OLD MEMO OF THE DIRECTOR "
"DIRECTEUR VAN DE ZOO WAAROP "                          - "OF THE ZOO SAYING DUE TO    "
"STAAT DAT AL HET PERSONEEL IN VERBAND MET "            - "BUDGET CUTS ALL PERSONNEL WILL BE         "
"BEZUINIGINGEN EEN LOONSVERLAGING TE WACHTEN STAAT."    - "CUT IN SALARIES.                                  "

"HET BANDJE BEVAT EEN ENKELE MAANDEN OUDE MEMO VAN DE " - "THE TAPE HOLDS A FEW MONTHS OLD MEMO OF THE DIRECTOR "
"DIRECTEUR VAN DE ZOO WAAROP "                          - "OF THE ZOO SAYING DUE TO    "
"STAAT DAT AL HET PERSONEEL IN VERBAND MET "            - "BUDGET CUTS ALL PERSONNEL WILL BE         "
"BEZUINIGINGEN EEN LOONSVERLAGING TE WACHTEN STAAT."    - "REDUCED IN WAGES.                                 "

  Bit up to discussion this one.
  With proposed change no 2x cut (lame perhaps).


#129

"U KIJKT OP UW GEMAK DE KOOI ROND EN VINDT EEN " - "YOU EXAMINE THE CAGE AT YOUR EASE AND FIND A  "
"ZEER BELANGRIJK BEWIJSSTUK!"                    - "VERY IMPORTANT EXHIBIT!    "

"U KIJKT OP UW GEMAK DE KOOI ROND EN VINDT EEN " - "YOU EXAMINE THE CAGE AT EASE AND FIND SOME    "
"ZEER BELANGRIJK BEWIJSSTUK!"                    - "VERY IMPORTANT EVIDENCE!   "

  An exhibit -> some evidence.
  I don't thinks 'exhibit' is right in this context (only e.g. when evidence is presented in court).


#132

"DE DRONKAARD KIJKT U WAT PIPS AAN EN ZEGT "            - "THE DRUNKARD LOOKS AT YOU PALELY AND SAYS "
""HEB JE WAT TE DRINKEN, ZE HEBBEN DIE BAR DEFINITIEF " - ""DO YOU HAVE SOMETHING TO DRINK,THEY CLOSED THAT BAR "
"GESLOTEN...""                                          - "FOR GOOD...""

  Still not convinced about this one. 'Looks at you palely' doesn't seem right, while something like e.g.
  'looks at you timidly' IS correct.
  I guess 'pips' can also be translated by 'peaky'. 'Hazy' also seems fitting..(?)


#151

"MIJ BABIES HONGER HEBBE!" - "MY BABIES HUNGRY ARE!   "
"MIJ BABIES HONGER HEBBE!" - ""MY BABIES HUNGRY ARE!" "

  * Original doesn't have quotes here, but they do apply?
    (consistent with other bits)


#157-160

"U HEEFT HET ICONVENTURE OPGELOST! "                           - "YOU HAVE SOLVED THE ICONVENTURE!  "
"DE 45 JARIGE J.G. WORDT IN VERZEKERDE BEWARING GESTELD "      - "45 YEAR OLD J.G. IS SENT INTO CUSTODY AND IS GLAD TO   "
"EN IS NU BLIJ DE TRALIES EENS VAN DE ANDERE KANT TE "         - "LOOK AT THE BARS FROM THE OTHER SIDE FOR A CHANGE.  "
"KUNNEN BEKIJKEN. GELUKKIG HOEFT DIT NIET 25 JAAR, DE "        - "LUCKILY FOR HIM, HE DOESN'T HAVE TO GO DOWN 25 YEARS "
"RECHTER DIE HET VONNIS VELT BLIJKT NAMELIJK IN ZIJN "         - "SINCE THE JUDGE APPEARS TO HAVE SUFFERED A DOG BITE "
"JEUGD DOOR EEN HOND GEBETEN TE ZIJN WAT ZICH NU "             - "IN HIS YOUTH, WHICH MANIFESTED IN A SEVERE      "
"MANIFESTEERD IN EEN LEVENSGROTE DIERENHAAT. LEUK VOOR JACK, " - "HATRED FOR ANIMALS IN GENERAL. WHICH IS GOOD ON JACK,       "
"WANT DIE WORDT NU VEROORDEELD TOT 1 MAAND GEVANGENISSTRAF "   - "BECAUSE HE IS SENTENCED TO 1 MONTH IMPRISONMENT AND       "
"EN HET VERPLICHT SPELEN VAN ICONVENTURES VAN RADARSOFT."      - "COMPULSORY PLAYING OF ICONVENTURES FROM RADARSOFT.     "

  * 'to go down' IS a proper UK slang for 'to be put in prison'.
    Not sure if valid as US as well. Though good enough for us I guess.
  * The original states '3 iconventures' (though we're free to play with that I guess)
    (wasn't this the only 'iconventure' btw? :P)


#178-180

""SHIT, IK GEEF ME OVER! "                                     - ""SHIT, I SURRENDER!     "
"IK KON ER NIET TEGEN, NA 25 JAAR TROUWE DIENST GAAT JE LOON " - "I COULD NOT STAND IT THAT AFTER 25 YEARS OF LOYAL SERVICE   "
"OMLAAG TERWIJL ER WEL GELD IS OM DIE SLOME BEESTEN TE "       - "MY SALARY IS LOWERED WHILE THERE IS ENOUGH MONEY TO   "
"VRETEN TE GEVEN MET PEPERDURE BIEFSTUKKEN! "                  - "FEED THOSE DUMB ANIMALS EXPENSIVE STEAKS!  "
"MAAR EEN AANTAL HEB IK ER TE PAKKEN GEHAD, VOORAL DIE GORE "  - "BUT I TOOK CARE OF SOME OF THEM, ESCPECIALLY THAT GROSS    "
"GORILLA DIE ME ALTIJD UITLACHTE, ROTBEEST!"                   - "GORILLA THAT ALWAYS LAUGHED AT ME, BITCH!"

""SHIT, IK GEEF ME OVER! "                                     - ""SHIT, I SURRENDER!     "
"IK KON ER NIET TEGEN, NA 25 JAAR TROUWE DIENST GAAT JE LOON " - "I COULD NOT STAND IT THAT AFTER 25 YEARS OF LOYAL SERVICE   "
"OMLAAG TERWIJL ER WEL GELD IS OM DIE SLOME BEESTEN TE "       - "MY SALARY IS LOWERED WHILE THERE IS ENOUGH MONEY TO   "
"VRETEN TE GEVEN MET PEPERDURE BIEFSTUKKEN! "                  - "FEED THOSE DUMB ANIMALS EXPENSIVE STEAKS!  "
"MAAR EEN AANTAL HEB IK ER TE PAKKEN GEHAD, VOORAL DIE GORE "  - "BUT I TOOK CARE OF SOME OF THEM, ESCPECIALLY THAT GROSS    "
"GORILLA DIE ME ALTIJD UITLACHTE, ROTBEEST!""                  - "GORILLA THAT ALWAYS MADE FUN OF ME, JERK!" "

  * laughed at me -> made fun of
  * bitch -> jerk (gorilla referred as male, 'bitch' has a female connotation)
  * forgot closing quote


#183-187

"ALS MEDEWERKER VAN DE DIEREN-HULP-ORGANISATIE HAED IS HET " - "AS AN EMPLOYEE OF THE ANIMAL-HELP-ORGANIZATION IT IS      "
"UW TAAK UIT TE ZOEKEN OF HIER EEN MISDAAD IN HET SPEL IS. " - "YOUR JOB TO DETERMINE WHETHER A CRIME WAS COMMITTED.      "
"HEEFT U EEN SCHULDIGE GEVONDEN DAN BENT U GEMACHTIGD "      - "WHEN YOU FIND A CRIMINAL, YOU ARE AUTHORIZED TO      "
"HEM OF HAAR TE ARRESTEREN. "                                - "ARREST HIM OR HER.         "
"U KUNT VOORWERPEN DIE U ONDERWEG VINDT MEENEMEN DOOR "      - "YOU CAN TAKE OBJECTS YOU FIND WITH YOU BY PUTTING    "
"DEZE IN UW KOFFER TE STOPPEN. U KUNT DINGEN OPENEN "        - "THEM IN YOUR SUITCASE. YOU CAN OPEN OR MOVE        "
"OF BEWEGEN DOOR HET JUISTE VOORWERP OP TE PAKKEN "          - "OBJECTS BY PICKING UP THE RIGHT OBJECT AND       "
"EN HIERMEE EEN BEPAALD IETS OP HET PLAATJE AAN TE "         - "POINTING AT SOMETHING ON THE                      "
"WIJZEN."                                                    - "SCREEN."
"(BV EEN DEUR OPENEN MET EEN SLEUTEL). "                     - "(E.G. OPENING A DOOR WITH A KEY).     "

"ALS MEDEWERKER VAN DE DIEREN-HULP-ORGANISATIE HAED IS HET " - "AS AN EMPLOYEE OF THE ANIMAL-AID-ORGANIZATION IT IS       "
"UW TAAK UIT TE ZOEKEN OF HIER EEN MISDAAD IN HET SPEL IS. " - "YOUR JOB TO DETERMINE WHETHER A CRIME WAS COMMITTED.      "
"HEEFT U EEN SCHULDIGE GEVONDEN DAN BENT U GEMACHTIGD "      - "WHEN YOU FIND A CULPRIT, YOU ARE AUTHORIZED TO       "
"HEM OF HAAR TE ARRESTEREN. "                                - "ARREST HIM OR HER.         "
"U KUNT VOORWERPEN DIE U ONDERWEG VINDT MEENEMEN DOOR "      - "YOU CAN TAKE OBJECTS YOU FIND WITH YOU BY PUTTING    "
"DEZE IN UW KOFFER TE STOPPEN. U KUNT DINGEN OPENEN "        - "THEM IN YOUR SUITCASE. YOU CAN OPEN OR MOVE        "
"OF BEWEGEN DOOR HET JUISTE VOORWERP OP TE PAKKEN "          - "OBJECTS BY PICKING UP THE RIGHT OBJECT AND       "
"EN HIERMEE EEN BEPAALD IETS OP HET PLAATJE AAN TE "         - "POINTING AT SOMETHING ON THE                      "
"WIJZEN."                                                    - "SCREEN."
"(BV EEN DEUR OPENEN MET EEN SLEUTEL). "                     - "(E.G. OPENING A DOOR WITH A KEY).     "

  * animal-AID-organisation (also see #070)
  * criminal -> culprit
  * perhaps better to add 'screen' to former line?

By ren

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30-01-2017, 16:01

Some more:

#011

EEN NOTA VAN EEN POT GIF (BEWIJS!) - A RECEIPT OF POISON JAR (EVIDENCE!)
EEN NOTA VAN EEN POT GIF (BEWIJS!) - A RECEIPT OF A JAR OF POISON (EVIDENCE!)

  (If this still can be adjusted).
  Otherwise it's better to say: 'A receipt of poison' I think.
  (E.g. a bottle of milk vs. a milk bottle = simply not the same.)


#050

HET EI VAN COLUMBUS - THE COLUMBUS' EGG
HET EI VAN COLUMBUS - COLUMBUS' EGG

By rderooy

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30-01-2017, 16:06

I think you would say

A RECEIPT FOR POISON

Because presumably the receipt itself is not the poison...

By ren

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30-01-2017, 16:13

rderooy: check Wink

By Manuel

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30-01-2017, 17:31

Quote:

""SHIT, IK GEEF ME OVER! " - ""SHIT, I SURRENDER! "

Isn't "DAMN" better in this context?

By ren

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30-01-2017, 18:05

@manuel: I feel it doesn't matter much..

Another fix:

#183

"ALS MEDEWERKER VAN DE DIEREN-HULP-ORGANISATIE HAED IS HET " - "AS AN EMPLOYEE OF THE ANIMAL-HELP-ORGANIZATION IT IS      "
"ALS MEDEWERKER VAN DE DIEREN-HULP-ORGANISATIE HAED IS HET " - "AS AN EMPLOYEE OF THE ANIMAL-AID-ORGANIZATION ATLA IT IS  "

   ATLA (all capitals) -> see #070 ;)

By ren

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30-01-2017, 18:13

#106-108

"DE BEWAKER VERTELD: "DE LAATSTE TIJD STERVEN ER "     - "THE KEEPER SAYS: "MORE AND MORE ANIMALS HAVE    "
"STEEDS DIEREN. WE ZIJN HOPELOOS! HET ZOU NATUURLIJK " - "BEEN DYING LATELY. WE ARE DESPERATE! IT WOULD BE    "
"RAMPZALIG ZIJN VOOR ONZE REPUTATIE ALS DIT BEKEND "   - "DISASTROUS TO OUR REPUTATION IF THIS WERE TO COME "
"WERD. VANDAAR DAT WE IN HET GEHEIM NIEUWE DIEREN "    - "OUT. THAT IS WHY WE SECRETLY BUY NEW ANIMALS."    "
"KOPEN."                                               - "      "

  added missing closing quote
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